Argument #1: Kilbourne

            The following TED talk from Kilbourne agrees on the idea that social media and ads do not help young women growing up feel confident. Advertisement effects all girls growing up to look like a person they can’t be. As TED Talk went on Kilbourne said, “The pressure on women to be young, thin and beautiful is no more intense than ever.” This is true what she said, women look at different build boards that display ultra-thin women with some formula to acquire a body like the picture displays. Most women, caught up with the look do not look to reality in understanding the photo is fake and the woman on it is probably not even that size. With photo shop occurring more and more women begin to feel more self-conscious of what they look like.

            Kilbourne then goes on to talk about Chanel, and how a man and woman are shown modeling their bodies. She explains how the male body is not touched up as much as the female’s body is in the Photoshop. I believe they do this because men and women respond differently to photos. Women will look at the photo instantly thing they want to be like them while men don’t look at the model and say I want to be like him, I just want the scent. Talking to girls and learning from experience they are too passionate on the way they look, but not all men look for a woman’s looks. I think woman can look uglier when they try to model themselves after another person.

            One topic really caught my attention when Kilbourne rambles on saying, “Girls at young ages are exposed to ads which then cause them to feel they will never be good enough or pretty.” I don’t agree because if this was happening to woman why isn’t the same effect happening to men trying to look like someone. I believe girl at a young age do it to themselves and find a way to bully themselves and their conscious. If the young girls grew up without those ads appearing they would be happy with themselves because they won’t see any challenger that “looks better” than them. She can easily take herself out of harm’s way by not watching those ads or avoiding the pictures because the companies’ job is to get customers to buy their products and if that’s what it takes they won’t stop.

Reflection #2

     The writing process helped me develop my writing from a high school student to a college level student. The most improve part of my writing process would be peer review, tutoring, and revising. Having my paper looked over in class helps build a solid foundation for the rest of my paper, I believe that if a student can pick out an idea that doesn't agree with your thesis, your professor will easily notice. Tutoring also helped me achieve my writing goals because having a higher level student going through a paper she once did helps me find the key topics that will make my paper stand out. I never was big into revising papers it was't a good habit but I'm slowly starting to enjoy it more because it then makes me feel better knowing I have a well written paper.
     Writing the papers we have completed so far can indicate that the writing process was being used from the start to the finish. The last paper we did on technology ruin our connection to the natural world it is clear that my grammar, spelling and word choice are at a much higher level. Going along with the paper having things done with time to others is what helped me a lot as well. I tried to space my days evenly that I will have enough time to accomplish each part of the process at the best of my ability.
     The process opened my eyes to better ways to achieve in trying to let a reader understand my topic as fast and easy as possible. Having help along the way from the peer review, tutoring, and revising with my professor I feel my paper became a social process not just concerning me. Taking the paper to different people gives me a chance to hear what they believe on the topic if they agree or disagree all the feedback is helpful. Their feedback can very well end up in my paper which in a sense makes it kind of theirs as well.
     As a writer i have learned a lot about myself from grammar to word choice. I feel that the more help i get the better my understanding for what words i should and should not use. I have just learned that contractions are not allowed in formal papers because my tutor in the learning center steered me to the right path.

Thesis

Have we lost touch with the natural world?  Have we lost who we truly are as a result of our interplay with technology?

Thesis-

As technology starts to become more advanced each day, we slowly start to lose the union between the Earth and humankind because technology demands our attention.

They Say, I Say

1.  The Introduction is titled, "Entering the Conversation"--what does this title reveal about your role as a research/argumentative writer?

The title reveals that the writing is going to argue the ideas of conversations relating to the writing in essays.

2.  Explain the "They Say, I Say" model (p. 3).  According to the authors, what is the "one underlying feature" that all good academic writing has?" (p. 3).

The "They say, I Say" is a formula to set up a writers view. Talk about the opponents topic then bounce off that idea with what your argument is. An underlying feature is to deeply engaged on people's view.

3.  Look at the templates under "Ways of Responding" (p. 8-9).  What is the purpose of these templates.  What do they show you as a writer?  Why should you consider using them?

The purpose of these templates are to generate thoughts in the readers mind not to have them responding yes or no. As a writer it shows that you are able to create debate and argument because when that is created the reader enjoyed your book.

4.  In Chapter One, "They Say," what important point does the story of Dr. X illustrate?  (p. 17-18).

It illustrates that having a clear argument from the start helps catch an audiences' attention instead of having them guess the whole time on your idea until the very end, and even then they might not know.

5.  Review the templates for articulating what "They Say" in your papers.  (p. 20-25).  Write down 3-5 templates that you might like to try out in your QDW paper.

In recent work, Y and Z have offered harsh critiques of ____ for ____.
Many people assume that_____.
Common sense seems to dictate that _____.
The standard way of thinking about topic X has it that _____.

6.  In Chapter Four, "Yes, No, OK But," what do the authors write is the most common and recognizable ways of responding to a text/author/idea? (p. 51)

With simply one word answers such as "I agree" or "I disagree" and then explain why.

7.  According to the authors, what is a good tactic for beginning your response? (p. 52)

Although some readers might think that this poem is about ____, it is in fact about ___.

8.  Look closely at the templates for disagreeing and for agreeing.  Attempt to draft your own statement about our topic of study:  The role of technology in our lives, using ONE of the templates in this section.  Try to organize your opinions on the reading we've done (Bauerlein, Lasn, Turkle) into one of these templates.  Fill in this template using these texts and place it in your blog. (p. 53-61)

By focusing on the idea that technology is a way for comfort, Dr. Turkle overlooks the deeper problem of that not everyone can receive the same comfort. Justine once received the wrong type of feedback to her tweet, which led to her being fired as well.

QDW #5 Black Mirriors

The future of technology has a bright future ahead of it with many positives and some negatives. Technology is being created to help keep soldiers safe by using droids. These little devices are being updated everyday and is saving lives. If the army can send in a robot instead of a person you are now risking zero lives instead of one. Technology is also taking over peoples jobs which is a down fall to having this technology. Robots save money as time passes so spending a larger amount of money at once instead of paying a person each week to do a job. People are also becoming more anti-social as technology becomes more advanced, people use their phones to get in touch with a company if they work at home. Video technology lets people have conferences with out even being in the same room as the person that is meeting you.


The episode we watched on black mirrors relates to social popularity and how people strive to be at the top. The main character wanted to be popular and she had an old friend that turned out to be a fake friend. Striving for popularity, Lacie tried her best to get like while popping up randomly in the middle of Naomi's wedding. She spoke her mind as she learned in her journey to the wedding that speaking the truth is better than holding it back just to be popular. This reflects society when people use social media to strive for popularity. Rappers, athletes, and others T.V. stars all use different apps to create an image for themselves that helps them get a product or song to the public to buy. The title of the series "Black Mirrors" symbolizes the bad in side of a person that technology can reflect in you. People in today's society have went in to this phase, because they will act differently to show their wealth. Phones have taken over kids lives is the consequences as a result of modern technology.

QDW #4 "Connected, but Alone"

People use the internet to try and reach out to one another so someone will listen. Instead of using physical interaction, or face to face conversation because it is uncomfortable to people and no one likes to get out of that zone. Social media's get instant feedback which gives the user even more comfort.

    This argument can be compared to when Lasn's talked about Justine riding on an airplane, tweeted a joke on Twitter and fell asleep on the plane with no service. When she woke up she brought the wrong attention to herself, instantly she got back negative feedback about her "racist joke" on the third world countries. Dr. Turkle's argument stands someone what true but not completely. She thought twitter would bring comfort and happiness but in reality Justine received horrible responses and was fired from her job because of it. That's where people don't think before doing, she should have thought about how people are more sensitive than others. The two together do reflect similar arguments but with two different outcomes.
     If I sat down with the two Dr. Turkle and Mrs. Lasn I'd ask what would be appreciate to post and when. Obviously they would I think they would say don't post something you second guess, if you are rethinking about posting something it probably is then a bad thing and shouldn't be posted unless you want to hear any type of feedback. I think they would agree with what I said about the idea of tweeting.


Your iPhone will soon become your best friend, siri, the talking response system to a iPhone will be developed that she understands what you ask. All everyone wants is to have someone listen to what you have to say and understand it, we feel fulfillment when having a conversation and the listener understands the speaker.

    Why do people feel the need to have a best friend robot to have understand you instead of a breathing person who can go through the same situation. Lasn talked about a system that can read what a person buys and sends coupons on stuff that are related to the object bought. This led to a young girl getting in trouble because baby coupons were sent to her house and her parents found it. This will just happen to kids when they are younger because parents monitor their children's phone, busting the kids will be easier if you had siri understand what you talk about.
     I'd ask Dr. Turkle why people are afraid to go out and meet people. If someone is so comfortable letting a device know something what would the difference be if that device was a living breathing human who can relate to a situation. Lasn idea seems ridiculous too, I feel like that is an invasion of privacy if a store can watch what you buy and then send things to you that are related to the topic. They both seem like they like their idea and would not agree with my side because it goes against what they have to say and since they are the ones who study the topic they wouldn't like a nineteen year old questioning the theories.


A elderly woman had a baby seal robot that kept the woman company, she felt that comfort because the seal was just faking empathy to reinsure the user. People are now seeking out different styles of robots that can seem life like but really it is just pretending. Technology is in demand of the people because it creates a sense of comfort.

    Lasn argued that companies should use algorithms to help find employees instead of using face to face interviews. Going along with Dr. Turkle's idea, the robots can't feel anything they just understand what is being said. Face to face contact can be a different form than what a robot sees, the interview has a sense of feeling to relate what the situation is. The old woman was happy that this robot understood her but just think, what if a person listened and responded with her thoughts not something that was controlled to say something. I just do not feel the same way about how robots are the new push for friendship and trust.
     Trust, that would be my question to them, how can a person trust a system. People express their self in many ways, ways that sometimes only can be understood if you listened to the story, how it was said with emotion. Lasn and Dr. Turkle both believe that robots aren't the saving grace but they think they can help people with their comfort. Agreeing to what I have said I think we would create a great conversation and new things to study about human interactions versus the interactions between humans and robots.

Connected, but Alone

"Connect, but Alone" and "Alone Together" symbolize an argument that people are living more on social media than in real life. She express that people don't like to interact face to face but on a social media app like Twitter or Instagram. A person feels most comfort when they are being looked at on these apps; the goal for the goal for Twitter is to get favorites and retweets and Instagram is about getting likes and comments. I do agree that the technology now a days is getting to excessive and people need to get off it. The reason that it is taking over is because our own president uses that to get out everything he wants to say. He tweets at least once a day on nonsense that doesn't need to be addressed in the times we are living in with all these tragedies.